Songwriting Hack – “Creating The Perfect Opening Line: Lyrics That Are Musical”

Often when we talk about key elements of a song, you’ll hear people talk about the opening line. They’ll say things like, that’s where you grab the listener’s attention, and that’s where you set the scene of the song. Or maybe if you don’t do it right, you’re going to lose the listener at the very first line.

All of this talk is generally focused on the lyric aspect. And I wanted to talk about a different aspect to the opening line of a song, something that can enhance the lyric and make it more powerful, emotional and make it resonate in a person. So today we’re going to talk about how to enhance a lyric with sound.

Music = Sound

Music, at its very essence, is really just sound. And lyrics have a sound – there are vowel sounds that rhyme and sound good to the ear; there are also hard consonant sounds like k’s and p’s. There’s a lot of sound involved in lyric, but often lyricists will look at what the words mean. But the sound part of it is equally important, and I’m going to prove it to you right here.

Example #1: “Whiskey Lullaby”

I’m going to take a song that was a past Song of the Year in the country genre called “Whiskey Lullaby”, because I think it has one of the greatest opening lines to a song that I’ve ever heard. It was sung by Alison Krauss and Brad Paisley, and the opening line to the song is: “She put him out like the burning end of a midnight cigarette.

For me, this opening line is brilliant. Not only because it paints a picture and you see the action and you feel the emotion, but the sound of the words themselves. It’s like poetry coming off the lips, yet it’s conversational at the same time. So why is that?

There are four rhymes right in a row. If you change the words up and take the rhymes, but let the meaning stay the same, does it still work? Say, “she put him out like the fiery end of a late night cigarette”. It’s still a nice line, still has all the images there, but there’s something about that ear candy of the vowel sounds that’s missing here. Those four rhymes right in a row actually make it more powerful; it haunts you, resonates more in your soul.

So the reason I think it’s a brilliant opening line is that it’s working on so many levels. Visually, meaning wise, and the element of sound; it has lyrics that are musical. And that’s what we strive for. That’s what’s going to make people remember your lyrics – when they’re firing on all cylinders.

Example #2: “Don’t Think I Don’t Think About It”

Another example is a song I was fortunate to have cut by Darius Rucker, “Don’t Think I Don’t Think About It”. When we were writing the first verse, we actually went back and rewrote the first line. Originally, we had “I drove off in a cloud of tail lights and dust”. Instead, we changed just one part of it, to sing “I left out in a cloud of tail lights and dust”. You get the two little words there that rhyme, and all of a sudden it’s ear candy; it adds a little bit more depth and emotion. Something like that can make a huge difference on how memorable the song is and how much impact it has to the listener.

Try It!

Music is not all just notes; it’s also sound – and I really want to stress that. So when you’re writing, be conscious of the sounds that you’re making. Does it add to the emotion, or does it take away? If there’s two ways of saying something, can we add some alliteration with consonant sounds? Can we add some vowels in there so that it rhymes internally?

So today I would like to challenge you that when you sit down and are trying to come up with that great opening line, that you not only think about the lyrics and the meaning of the words, but also think of the sound of the words, because they are equally important.

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Author: Clay Mills