“Unlock the Secrets of Fierce Editing: Transform Your Manuscripts from Mundane to Mind-Blowing!”
- Search your manuscript for the word “as”.
- Remove it from every sentence that uses “as” to make two events simultaneous.
That’s it. very simple. Extremely effective.
A few examples will make this all clear. In each example, I’ll show you the wrong way to do it, followed by an explanation of why it’s wrong, followed by a better option.
Example 1
Wrong: Joe threw a punch at Eric as he approached.
Why it’s wrong: Your purpose as a novelist is to create a movie in your reader’s brain. This sentence throws up several speed bumps for your reader. Let’s break it down to see why.
